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Suggestion to writing Kaleuns:
1.) make your paragraphs short (empty spaces invite the eye to read) 2.) Avoid the passive voice like the plague ( the convoy was attacked--the toast was buttered) In active voice: Balz attacked the convoy. Bernard buttered the toast. 
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