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snwcrsh · 01-23-08, 11:35 AM

How about some paragraphs? This block of text is not very inviting to read :/

NealT · 01-23-08, 05:14 PM

You did a nice job DESPITE having Barnard in your corner...

And you learned the most important lesson - never trust what Balz says

:rotfl::rotfl::rotfl:

Brag · 01-23-08, 07:14 PM

Suggestion to writing Kaleuns:
1.) make your paragraphs short (empty spaces invite the eye to read)
2.) Avoid the passive voice like the plague ( the convoy was attacked--the toast was buttered) In active voice: Balz attacked the convoy. Bernard buttered the toast.

T.Von Hogan · 01-24-08, 09:18 AM

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Originally Posted by Brag

Suggestion to writing Kaleuns:
1.) make your paragraphs short (empty spaces invite the eye to read)
2.) Avoid the passive voice like the plague ( the convoy was attacked--the toast was buttered) In active voice: Balz attacked the convoy. Bernard buttered the toast.

Appriciate the tips, and after writing that i can add a 3rd lol. View as a preview before submitting

ReallyDedPoet · 01-24-08, 09:28 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by T.Von Hogan

Quote:

Originally Posted by Brag

Suggestion to writing Kaleuns:
1.) make your paragraphs short (empty spaces invite the eye to read)
2.) Avoid the passive voice like the plague ( the convoy was attacked--the toast was buttered) In active voice: Balz attacked the convoy. Bernard buttered the toast.

Appriciate the tips, and after writing that i can add a 3rd lol. View as a preview before submitting

Yeah, the preview option is a nice one. Use it for posts, screenshots, and adjusting\creating your sig.

RDP

Jimbuna · 01-24-08, 11:27 AM

A nice read TVH

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Jimbuna Chief of the Boat Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: 250 metres below the surface Posts: 190,500 Downloads: 63 Uploads: 13	A nice read TVH __________________ Wise men speak because they have something to say; Fools because they have to say something. Oh my God, not again!!

01-23-08, 05:14 PM	#2
NealT Ace of the Deep Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: 2 Meters Below Jimbuna Posts: 1,060 Downloads: 4 Uploads: 0	You did a nice job DESPITE having Barnard in your corner... And you learned the most important lesson - never trust what Balz says :rotfl::rotfl::rotfl: