GELWITZ CIPHER COMMENTS - Page 2

Brag · 08-26-11, 08:11 AM

Chapters 5, 6, 7, are up.

timmy41 · 08-26-11, 01:29 PM

Quote:

The earliest date was 18 April 1945, the day after the war ended.

But VE day was May 8th, error or is it referring to something else?

Exciting story so far!

Brag · 08-26-11, 01:53 PM

OOPS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thanks for the heads uo

Jimbuna · 08-26-11, 03:17 PM

Excellent reading Alex

timmy41 · 08-26-11, 08:15 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Brag

OOPS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thanks for the heads uo

there was also another quote missing a quotation mark somewhere before that, but I forgot where it was exactly.

keep up the story though, its a great read!

Brag · 08-31-11, 09:29 AM

Chapters 8 and 9 are up!

Gerald · 08-31-11, 09:34 AM

Good ... I still read,

Brag · 09-02-11, 09:48 AM

Chapters 10 and 11 are up.

timmy41 · 09-02-11, 01:49 PM

Quote:

Appearing to have forgotten them, Dougan spooned ice ream.

typo
keep it up!

Jimbuna · 09-02-11, 02:24 PM

Keep it coming

Brag · 09-07-11, 10:05 AM

New insallment up
Don,t be shy to comment, if you don't like it

Gerald · 09-07-11, 10:09 AM

Do not ever .... read something that is not good from you,

flag4 · 09-07-11, 10:50 AM

...i like it. i think it snaps along nicely from what i have read so far.

my only thing is this:His gaze rested on the laptop sitting on a 1930s style chest of drawers matching an armoire of the same period.'

i think this sentence is a bit clunky and a a bit long winded. i think you should name the 1930's style chest of drawers - the design/period, the maker. i think it would tighten this sentence and lend it more brevity and polish, because the rest of the writing clicks along smoothly in terse dialogue and narrative. name things when they can be named, Art Deco, perhaps?

have i gone too far? no offence intended

Brag · 09-07-11, 01:11 PM

Flag, great suggestion! it is clunky a clunky sentence. Many thanks!

flag4 · 09-07-11, 03:33 PM

hi Brag

if you have not already read this book then give it a try. the writing is tight and compressed, a classic war time adventure story.
along the thoughts i have spoken (...but who am i to speek? - you have been published!!)

http://www.amazon.co.uk/Rogue-Male-G...5426987&sr=1-1

i hope this link works, if not, the writers name and novel are Geoffrey Household - Rogue Male.

08-26-11, 08:11 AM	#16
Brag Navy Seal Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Docked on a Russian pond Posts: 7,072 Downloads: 2 Uploads: 0	Chapters 5, 6, 7, are up. __________________ Espionage, adventure, suspense, are just a click away Click here to look inside Brag's book: Amazon.com: Kingmaker: Alexey Braguine: Books Order Kingmaker here: http://www.subsim.com/store.html For Tactics visit:http://www.freewebs.com/kielman/

08-26-11, 01:53 PM	#18
Brag Navy Seal Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Docked on a Russian pond Posts: 7,072 Downloads: 2 Uploads: 0	OOPS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thanks for the heads uo __________________ Espionage, adventure, suspense, are just a click away Click here to look inside Brag's book: Amazon.com: Kingmaker: Alexey Braguine: Books Order Kingmaker here: http://www.subsim.com/store.html For Tactics visit:http://www.freewebs.com/kielman/

08-26-11, 03:17 PM	#19
Jimbuna Chief of the Boat Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: 250 metres below the surface Posts: 190,818 Downloads: 63 Uploads: 13	Excellent reading Alex __________________ Wise men speak because they have something to say; Fools because they have to say something. Oh my God, not again!!

08-31-11, 09:29 AM	#21
Brag Navy Seal Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Docked on a Russian pond Posts: 7,072 Downloads: 2 Uploads: 0	Chapters 8 and 9 are up! __________________ Espionage, adventure, suspense, are just a click away Click here to look inside Brag's book: Amazon.com: Kingmaker: Alexey Braguine: Books Order Kingmaker here: http://www.subsim.com/store.html For Tactics visit:http://www.freewebs.com/kielman/

08-31-11, 09:34 AM	#22
Gerald SUBSIM Newsman Join Date: May 2008 Location: Close to sea Posts: 24,254 Downloads: 553 Uploads: 0	Good ... I still read, __________________ Nothing in life is to be feard,it is only to be understood. Marie Curie

09-02-11, 09:48 AM	#23
Brag Navy Seal Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Docked on a Russian pond Posts: 7,072 Downloads: 2 Uploads: 0	Chapters 10 and 11 are up. __________________ Espionage, adventure, suspense, are just a click away Click here to look inside Brag's book: Amazon.com: Kingmaker: Alexey Braguine: Books Order Kingmaker here: http://www.subsim.com/store.html For Tactics visit:http://www.freewebs.com/kielman/

09-02-11, 02:24 PM	#25
Jimbuna Chief of the Boat Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: 250 metres below the surface Posts: 190,818 Downloads: 63 Uploads: 13	Keep it coming __________________ Wise men speak because they have something to say; Fools because they have to say something. Oh my God, not again!!

09-07-11, 10:05 AM	#26
Brag Navy Seal Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Docked on a Russian pond Posts: 7,072 Downloads: 2 Uploads: 0	New insallment up Don,t be shy to comment, if you don't like it __________________ Espionage, adventure, suspense, are just a click away Click here to look inside Brag's book: Amazon.com: Kingmaker: Alexey Braguine: Books Order Kingmaker here: http://www.subsim.com/store.html For Tactics visit:http://www.freewebs.com/kielman/

09-07-11, 10:09 AM	#27
Gerald SUBSIM Newsman Join Date: May 2008 Location: Close to sea Posts: 24,254 Downloads: 553 Uploads: 0	Do not ever .... read something that is not good from you, __________________ Nothing in life is to be feard,it is only to be understood. Marie Curie

09-07-11, 10:50 AM	#28
flag4 Watch Officer Join Date: May 2007 Location: as far away as possible Posts: 1,625 Downloads: 147 Uploads: 0	...i like it. i think it snaps along nicely from what i have read so far. my only thing is this:His gaze rested on the laptop sitting on a 1930s style chest of drawers matching an armoire of the same period.' i think this sentence is a bit clunky and a a bit long winded. i think you should name the 1930's style chest of drawers - the design/period, the maker. i think it would tighten this sentence and lend it more brevity and polish, because the rest of the writing clicks along smoothly in terse dialogue and narrative. name things when they can be named, Art Deco, perhaps? have i gone too far? no offence intended __________________ [SIGPIC][/SIGPIC] ' We are here on Earth to fart around. Don't let anybody tell you any different.' Kurt Vonnegut

09-07-11, 01:11 PM	#29
Brag Navy Seal Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Docked on a Russian pond Posts: 7,072 Downloads: 2 Uploads: 0	Flag, great suggestion! it is clunky a clunky sentence. Many thanks! __________________ Espionage, adventure, suspense, are just a click away Click here to look inside Brag's book: Amazon.com: Kingmaker: Alexey Braguine: Books Order Kingmaker here: http://www.subsim.com/store.html For Tactics visit:http://www.freewebs.com/kielman/

09-07-11, 03:33 PM	#30
flag4 Watch Officer Join Date: May 2007 Location: as far away as possible Posts: 1,625 Downloads: 147 Uploads: 0	hi Brag if you have not already read this book then give it a try. the writing is tight and compressed, a classic war time adventure story. along the thoughts i have spoken (...but who am i to speek? - you have been published!!) http://www.amazon.co.uk/Rogue-Male-G...5426987&sr=1-1 i hope this link works, if not, the writers name and novel are Geoffrey Household - Rogue Male. __________________ [SIGPIC][/SIGPIC] ' We are here on Earth to fart around. Don't let anybody tell you any different.' Kurt Vonnegut