My New Story "Haxan" Is Out! Woo HOO!

Iron Budokan · 03-26-09, 05:28 AM

Hey, guys,

There were some people who wanted to know when my new dark fantasy story about a mythical Western town in New Mexico would be published after I posted that earlier link regarding my website. (You guys were a big help in giving me advice about that, btw. Thank you.)

"Haxan" just went live today in Beneath Ceaseless Skies Magazine.

I must say so far so good. It helped me become a memeber of the Horror Writers Association which can't hurt my career. Anyway, here's the link and I really hope you guys like it:

http://www.beneath-ceaseless-skies.com/story.php?s=27

There are also character sketches (added content) about the principle characters on my website, in case you're intersted in reading more about them, too, including U.S. Marshall John Marwood which just went up today: http://kennethmarkhoover.com/haxan

Please, feel free to let me know what you think about the story. I'm pretty psyched about it so far. Thanks!

SteamWake · 03-26-09, 08:07 AM

Congradulations I wish you all the best of luck and fortune

UnderseaLcpl · 03-26-09, 09:21 AM

I read it, and it seems like good stuff. Hard to say since I am not an enthusiast of the genre. It's hard for me to picture everything in my head (I'm one of those who lack imagination)

However, I do have a couple of constructive criticisms for you;

Quote:

Shiner Larsen’s home wasn’t much more than a broken down hovel with a dirt roof.

A dirt roof? No wonder it broke down

Also, the story seemed to jump from setting to setting a bit too quickly, and the characters could use some more depth (within the story).

That being said, I wouldn't trust my opinions too much. Horror and mystery are both genres I tend to avoid when I don't avoid fiction altogether.

Thanks for a good read, though

Sailor Steve · 03-26-09, 12:38 PM

Congratulations on getting published.

Iron Budokan · 03-27-09, 11:26 AM

Thank, guys! Haha, very good catch about the hovel, too, you got me. I believe I was thinking more along the lines of a dugout or a flat roof with a layer of dirt on it for added protection. Hee. Maybe we can correct it when it's archived.

03-26-09, 05:28 AM	#1
Iron Budokan Sea Lord Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Texas Posts: 1,778 Downloads: 32 Uploads: 0	My New Story "Haxan" Is Out! Woo HOO! Hey, guys, There were some people who wanted to know when my new dark fantasy story about a mythical Western town in New Mexico would be published after I posted that earlier link regarding my website. (You guys were a big help in giving me advice about that, btw. Thank you.) "Haxan" just went live today in Beneath Ceaseless Skies Magazine. I must say so far so good. It helped me become a memeber of the Horror Writers Association which can't hurt my career. Anyway, here's the link and I really hope you guys like it: http://www.beneath-ceaseless-skies.com/story.php?s=27 There are also character sketches (added content) about the principle characters on my website, in case you're intersted in reading more about them, too, including U.S. Marshall John Marwood which just went up today: http://kennethmarkhoover.com/haxan Please, feel free to let me know what you think about the story. I'm pretty psyched about it so far. Thanks! __________________ "You will take on England wherever you find her ships, and you will break her power at sea." --Iron Coffins, Herbert A. Werner http://kennethmarkhoover.com

03-26-09, 08:07 AM	#2
SteamWake Rear Admiral Join Date: Mar 2005 Posts: 13,224 Downloads: 5 Uploads: 0	Congradulations I wish you all the best of luck and fortune __________________ Follow the progress of Mr. Mulligan : http://www.subsim.com/radioroom/showthread.php?t=147648

03-26-09, 12:38 PM	#4
Sailor Steve Eternal Patrol Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: High in the mountains of Utah Posts: 50,369 Downloads: 745 Uploads: 249	Congratulations on getting published. __________________ “Never do anything you can't take back.” —Rocky Russo

03-27-09, 11:26 AM	#5
Iron Budokan Sea Lord Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Texas Posts: 1,778 Downloads: 32 Uploads: 0	Thank, guys! Haha, very good catch about the hovel, too, you got me. I believe I was thinking more along the lines of a dugout or a flat roof with a layer of dirt on it for added protection. Hee. Maybe we can correct it when it's archived. __________________ "You will take on England wherever you find her ships, and you will break her power at sea." --Iron Coffins, Herbert A. Werner http://kennethmarkhoover.com