The Short Story Thread

Jeff-Groves · 06-10-20, 05:02 PM

That don't qualify for this thread.

Aktungbby · 06-10-20, 05:04 PM

fixed!

Jeff-Groves · 06-10-20, 05:07 PM

LOL!!
And purple? WTF?
Mayhaps we can get away since i did mention Jimbuna in my story!

Aktungbby · 06-10-20, 05:24 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by the beast

You can make it any font you want, any color, and any size.

well this is a short story thread and my 'prose is always....purple'

BOO-BOOP-B-DOO! BBY ...

<and ''a picture is always worth a thousand words'' which saves on my blogging carpal tunnel syndrôme!

Eisenwurst · 06-10-20, 08:42 PM

"Lockdown Blues" by Eisenwurst.

"It was a dark and stormy night. The wind howled, and the rain came down in buckets. Sam's fingers desperately scrambled to find a toehold on the cliff edge. He could feel it crumbling beneath his fingers. He fell, screaming.....AAAAHHHHHhhhhhh....."

Just then there was a knock on the door. He put down the book he was reading and answered it. There she stood....5'8", long blonde hair covering one eye, broad brim hat, figure hugging dress, long cigarette holder with a smouldering cigarette. Her perfume washed over him......"Mr Spade?"....He quickly glanced at the name on the door.

"Yep, that's me....how can I help you?"

"I'm lost...I'm looking for the "Ladies".

"Down the corridor, first on the left". He said disappointed. He watched her walk out of his life and shut the door.

He went over to the open window and watched the submarine leaving port. The crew were lined up on deck, and the band was playing one of Elvis's songs.

Since the lockdown started not a lot was happening, but it was time for a drink.

The End.

Disclaimer :- No stunning blondes or submarines were harmed in this story. And only the facts were changed to protect the innocent.

Mr Quatro · 06-10-20, 09:49 PM

Seven paragraphs? I'm just getting started at the seventh paragraph, but rules are rules, except I don't write short stories I write screenplays.

Here's one in screenplay format:

“CARETAKERS CONVENTION”

Screenplay by:
Mr Quatro

FADE IN:
A grave yard in Long Island, New York between two major freeways, is one of the largest grave yards I have ever seen. The entire story is in and around this Long Island cemetery. The original story was designed for an old actor like Jimmy Stewart, but as things would have it, he is no longer available for casting.
Kirk Douglas is a natural for the main character of, “The Caretakers Convention”. But he has also passed away. I only mention him as an image to think of.

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
The rules of the life after death are strictly adhered to in this grave yard. No one can leave the cemetery without a pass from,

“The Caretaker”, “Mr. Justice” (Kirk Douglas).

Then the biggest all time extravaganza comes to town. Once every century,every one hundred years or so as the story goes, a convention is held for all of the grave yard caretakers like “ Mr. Justice”. They come from all over the world.

As in every good story there has to be conflict. Someone is plotting to take over the cemetery and thus eliminating “Mr. Justice’s” job as the caretaker of this particular cemetery in Long Island, New York.

They plot and plan on how to get “Mr. Justice” in trouble.
They take over the convention center at night after everyone has gone home. After all they are for the most part invisible, except for the mummies and the shaking bones, plus the cats and the crows. The ghost have different forms, but all get in trouble if anyone can prove they are real. In trouble with who else, but the “Biggest Daddy” of them all ... God like in God of all creation

If you haven’t guessed it by now we have the beginnings of one of the greatest spook stories of all time. That’s right folks, spooky it is.

Get your pillows ready kids. Mommy, mommy can we go see, “The Caretakers Convention”?

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

FINALLY FADE IN:
It’s late at night and the gates of a cemetery are opening up automatically with a limousine waiting to drive through. Inside of course is the gang boss and his gang. He has a Bill Murray look to him.

No one can be seen opening the gates in the real world, but after they go through,two blue ghostly figures dressed up like undertakers can be seen closing the gates.

DISSOLVE TO:
The inside of the limousine.

GANG MEMBER
I don’t see no garage door opener or nothing.

SECOND GANG MEMBER
How did you do that boss?

BOSS NUMBER ONE
I got connections.

DISSOLVE TO:
The limousine arrives at vault of crypts with a hearse and several men already around it.

BOSS NUMBER TWO
It’s about time ... This place is too spooky even for me.

They get out to greet each other.

BOSS NUMBER ONE
Sid, it’s been way too long. Why don’t you stop by more often?

BOSS NUMBER TWO
Why? So, you can kill me.

Boss number one acts offended.

BOSS NUMBER TWO (CONT'D)
I mean with kindness of course. Your just too nice a guy to have to deal with, but I can’t trust you.

Boss number one acts humble and hugs him.

BOSS NUMBER ONE
I know just what you mean.

BOSS NUMBER TWO
So, you brought the money? Right!

Boss number one hands Sid back his gun.

BOSS NUMBER ONE
Here! I hope it wasn’t loaded. The money! Of course I brought the money. Did you bring this chill? Brrr!

Gang member of number one boss hands over the legal size brief case to his boss.

BOSS NUMBER ONE (CONT'D)
First things first ... The purity of this deal rest on how pure it really is.

BOSS NUMBER TWO
Pure I ain’t, but pure it is.

Snaps his fingers and the vault of one crypt opens. A gang member of the second boss hands it over all nice and bundled up.

BOSS NUMBER TWO (CONT'D)
One hundred and forty four little packets. All same same.

BOSS NUMBER ONE
Just curious Sid. Why one hundred and forty-four little packets? You know what I mean? Why not one hundred and forty-five or one hundred and sixty or one hundred and ninety. Why one hundred and forty-four?

BOSS NUMBER TWO
Well, you see it’s like this I got some boys working on the airline baggage detail down in Rio right. They had to put
one small packet in everyones luggage, see.

BOSS NUMBER ONE
I see. Then after they land you follow them home. Ring the bell on one hundred and forty-four doors and get your goods back.

BOSS NUMBER TWO
Something like that. Except the plane had over two hundred passengers. About sixty of them got caught. Win some lose some.

GANG MEMBER
It’s pure boss.

BOSS NUMBER ONE
Here’s your money, Sid. Count it ... I don’t want you visiting my restaurant with a machine gun.

BOSS NUMBER TWO
We don’t count it anymore. We scan it.
His gang is already taking the money out and fanning it with a hand held scanner. When strange noises start happening.

GANG MEMBER
What's that?

A gang of ghost were watching the proceedings and knocked over something.

BOSS NUMBER ONE
I’m out of here ... Bye Sid.

BOSS NUMBER TWO
I’m right behind you.

DISSOLVE TO:

One ghost to another

GHOUL ONE
Now why did you do that for?

GHOUL TWO
I hate drug dealers ... They cost me my life.

GHOUL ONE
But we had them all lined up to home with them.

ANOTHER GHOUL
Get them ... They’re getting away.

The gates that were opening ... start closing.

DISSOLVE TO:
The window is coming down and the gang member is sticking his head out with a machine gun, but he sticks his head back in.

GANG MEMBER
What am I suppose to shoot at boss? There’s nothing out there.

BOSS NUMBER ONE
Uh, shoot at the gate. Maybe it’ll open again.
He shoots at the gate, but at the last minute the driver swerves to miss the closed gate and the other Boss behind him in the hearse, with his gang, have to make a panic stop into the shrubbery.

DISSOLVE TO:
The ghouls are having fun now. A whole family with little children (spiritually of course)on their laps, sitting on their head markers.

GHOST FAMILY
This is fun mommy.

THE OTHER CHILD
Just like the movies we use to go, uh daddy.

DADDY
Fun till Mr. Justice gets here.

DISSOLVE TO:
The car is still swerving around the cemetery and firing at everything he can hit.

DISSOLVE TO:
The boss is pulling his gang member back in.

BOSS NUMBER ONE
May I make a small suggestion. Save the bullets till you have something worth shooting.

GANG MEMBER
I’m scared Boss.

He grabs him and hugs him like a child in his arms.

BOSS NUMBER ONE
Me too ... Now, now every things going to be okay.

He takes the drugs in the legal brief case away from the other gang member.

BOSS NUMBER ONE (CONT'D)
Here let me take care of that ... Go back to the main entrance.

DRIVER
Where’s that boss?

BOSS NUMBER ONE
Do I have to do everything? Stop the car. Let me out.

The car stops and he gets out.

Did I go over seven ... so sorry the convention is next at the convention center after it is closed at night that is.

Catfish · 06-11-20, 02:20 AM

Wow i think there is actually some good stuff in here!

06-10-20, 05:04 PM	#2
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Eisenwurst Silent Hunter Join Date: Jan 2010 Posts: 3,765 Downloads: 58 Uploads: 0	"Lockdown Blues" by Eisenwurst. "It was a dark and stormy night. The wind howled, and the rain came down in buckets. Sam's fingers desperately scrambled to find a toehold on the cliff edge. He could feel it crumbling beneath his fingers. He fell, screaming.....AAAAHHHHHhhhhhh....." Just then there was a knock on the door. He put down the book he was reading and answered it. There she stood....5'8", long blonde hair covering one eye, broad brim hat, figure hugging dress, long cigarette holder with a smouldering cigarette. Her perfume washed over him......"Mr Spade?"....He quickly glanced at the name on the door. "Yep, that's me....how can I help you?" "I'm lost...I'm looking for the "Ladies". "Down the corridor, first on the left". He said disappointed. He watched her walk out of his life and shut the door. He went over to the open window and watched the submarine leaving port. The crew were lined up on deck, and the band was playing one of Elvis's songs. Since the lockdown started not a lot was happening, but it was time for a drink. The End. Disclaimer :- No stunning blondes or submarines were harmed in this story. And only the facts were changed to protect the innocent. __________________

06-10-20, 09:49 PM	#6
Mr Quatro Navy Seal Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 6,772 Downloads: 0 Uploads: 0	Seven paragraphs? I'm just getting started at the seventh paragraph, but rules are rules, except I don't write short stories I write screenplays. Here's one in screenplay format: “CARETAKERS CONVENTION” Screenplay by: Mr Quatro FADE IN: A grave yard in Long Island, New York between two major freeways, is one of the largest grave yards I have ever seen. The entire story is in and around this Long Island cemetery. The original story was designed for an old actor like Jimmy Stewart, but as things would have it, he is no longer available for casting. Kirk Douglas is a natural for the main character of, “The Caretakers Convention”. But he has also passed away. I only mention him as an image to think of. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> The rules of the life after death are strictly adhered to in this grave yard. No one can leave the cemetery without a pass from, “The Caretaker”, “Mr. Justice” (Kirk Douglas). Then the biggest all time extravaganza comes to town. Once every century,every one hundred years or so as the story goes, a convention is held for all of the grave yard caretakers like “ Mr. Justice”. They come from all over the world. As in every good story there has to be conflict. Someone is plotting to take over the cemetery and thus eliminating “Mr. Justice’s” job as the caretaker of this particular cemetery in Long Island, New York. They plot and plan on how to get “Mr. Justice” in trouble. They take over the convention center at night after everyone has gone home. After all they are for the most part invisible, except for the mummies and the shaking bones, plus the cats and the crows. The ghost have different forms, but all get in trouble if anyone can prove they are real. In trouble with who else, but the “Biggest Daddy” of them all ... God like in God of all creation If you haven’t guessed it by now we have the beginnings of one of the greatest spook stories of all time. That’s right folks, spooky it is. Get your pillows ready kids. Mommy, mommy can we go see, “The Caretakers Convention”? >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> FINALLY FADE IN: It’s late at night and the gates of a cemetery are opening up automatically with a limousine waiting to drive through. Inside of course is the gang boss and his gang. He has a Bill Murray look to him. No one can be seen opening the gates in the real world, but after they go through,two blue ghostly figures dressed up like undertakers can be seen closing the gates. DISSOLVE TO: The inside of the limousine. GANG MEMBER I don’t see no garage door opener or nothing. SECOND GANG MEMBER How did you do that boss? BOSS NUMBER ONE I got connections. DISSOLVE TO: The limousine arrives at vault of crypts with a hearse and several men already around it. BOSS NUMBER TWO It’s about time ... This place is too spooky even for me. They get out to greet each other. BOSS NUMBER ONE Sid, it’s been way too long. Why don’t you stop by more often? BOSS NUMBER TWO Why? So, you can kill me. Boss number one acts offended. BOSS NUMBER TWO (CONT'D) I mean with kindness of course. Your just too nice a guy to have to deal with, but I can’t trust you. Boss number one acts humble and hugs him. BOSS NUMBER ONE I know just what you mean. BOSS NUMBER TWO So, you brought the money? Right! Boss number one hands Sid back his gun. BOSS NUMBER ONE Here! I hope it wasn’t loaded. The money! Of course I brought the money. Did you bring this chill? Brrr! Gang member of number one boss hands over the legal size brief case to his boss. BOSS NUMBER ONE (CONT'D) First things first ... The purity of this deal rest on how pure it really is. BOSS NUMBER TWO Pure I ain’t, but pure it is. Snaps his fingers and the vault of one crypt opens. A gang member of the second boss hands it over all nice and bundled up. BOSS NUMBER TWO (CONT'D) One hundred and forty four little packets. All same same. BOSS NUMBER ONE Just curious Sid. Why one hundred and forty-four little packets? You know what I mean? Why not one hundred and forty-five or one hundred and sixty or one hundred and ninety. Why one hundred and forty-four? BOSS NUMBER TWO Well, you see it’s like this I got some boys working on the airline baggage detail down in Rio right. They had to put one small packet in everyones luggage, see. BOSS NUMBER ONE I see. Then after they land you follow them home. Ring the bell on one hundred and forty-four doors and get your goods back. BOSS NUMBER TWO Something like that. Except the plane had over two hundred passengers. About sixty of them got caught. Win some lose some. GANG MEMBER It’s pure boss. BOSS NUMBER ONE Here’s your money, Sid. Count it ... I don’t want you visiting my restaurant with a machine gun. BOSS NUMBER TWO We don’t count it anymore. We scan it. His gang is already taking the money out and fanning it with a hand held scanner. When strange noises start happening. GANG MEMBER What's that? A gang of ghost were watching the proceedings and knocked over something. BOSS NUMBER ONE I’m out of here ... Bye Sid. BOSS NUMBER TWO I’m right behind you. DISSOLVE TO: One ghost to another GHOUL ONE Now why did you do that for? GHOUL TWO I hate drug dealers ... They cost me my life. GHOUL ONE But we had them all lined up to home with them. ANOTHER GHOUL Get them ... They’re getting away. The gates that were opening ... start closing. DISSOLVE TO: The window is coming down and the gang member is sticking his head out with a machine gun, but he sticks his head back in. GANG MEMBER What am I suppose to shoot at boss? There’s nothing out there. BOSS NUMBER ONE Uh, shoot at the gate. Maybe it’ll open again. He shoots at the gate, but at the last minute the driver swerves to miss the closed gate and the other Boss behind him in the hearse, with his gang, have to make a panic stop into the shrubbery. DISSOLVE TO: The ghouls are having fun now. A whole family with little children (spiritually of course)on their laps, sitting on their head markers. GHOST FAMILY This is fun mommy. THE OTHER CHILD Just like the movies we use to go, uh daddy. DADDY Fun till Mr. Justice gets here. DISSOLVE TO: The car is still swerving around the cemetery and firing at everything he can hit. DISSOLVE TO: The boss is pulling his gang member back in. BOSS NUMBER ONE May I make a small suggestion. Save the bullets till you have something worth shooting. GANG MEMBER I’m scared Boss. He grabs him and hugs him like a child in his arms. BOSS NUMBER ONE Me too ... Now, now every things going to be okay. He takes the drugs in the legal brief case away from the other gang member. BOSS NUMBER ONE (CONT'D) Here let me take care of that ... Go back to the main entrance. DRIVER Where’s that boss? BOSS NUMBER ONE Do I have to do everything? Stop the car. Let me out. The car stops and he gets out. Did I go over seven ... so sorry the convention is next at the convention center after it is closed at night that is. __________________ pla•teau noun a relatively stable level, period, or condition a level of attainment or achievement Lord help me get to the next plateau ..

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06-10-20, 05:02 PM	#1
Jeff-Groves GLOBAL MODDING TERRORIST Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 5,655 Downloads: 137 Uploads: 0	That don't qualify for this thread.

06-10-20, 05:07 PM	#3
Jeff-Groves GLOBAL MODDING TERRORIST Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 5,655 Downloads: 137 Uploads: 0	LOL!! And purple? WTF? Mayhaps we can get away since i did mention Jimbuna in my story!