Very well written but may I make just one suggestion ?
Try setting a mood for your readers by describing what the weather is like and if it's day or night. And the time of year.
Example > Making my way along the pier towards the Sub Pens, I look
out at the harbor and see that the fog still lays heavy
upon the water. And now there is a slight drizzle mixed
in that will make for poor visibility once we set sail.
It's only 0:500 and we set off in just an hours time.
Now I can see U-14 up ahead in its pen.
It appears that most of the crew have already arrived
and the dew from the fog makes U-14 look shiney and
sleek like a shark ready for the hunt.
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