I rather enjoy the poem "
On Time" by John Milton. I also happen to like the narrator's rendition of it. I've never been quite as adept as I would've liked at reading poetry but the narrator (in my opinion) show aptitude in his presentation. I believe poetry, if properly read, should reflect the context of the era in which it was written (
17th century England in this instance), hence the "flowery" nature of the narrator's presentation.
I agree that it adds/suggests a level of class that is not found in today's games or sims. I also agree with
Daniel Prates and think you should eliminate the profanities. It detracts from the presentation and class that you would want to project to the general public (if that is your intention). Don't forget, many people of varying age levels play this sim and may view your tutorial. Though they most certainly may have heard this type of language before, you don't want to imply that you condone it by using it yourself. I certainly don't use it around
my children.
I also would omit the personal medical references since they are nobody's business but your own and add nothing to the validity of the presentation.
Other than that, I think it's pretty good. There you have it, my honest and sincere opinion.
