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Gargamel
12-21-10, 01:21 AM
Inspired by some of the other writers on here, I have begun my own tale. It may be just this one chapter, or it may turn into a full novel. I know I have at least one more story in me that needs to be told, we'll see if I can keep it up.

Please Feel free to comment and criticize, that's the only way I can improve. My attempts at German may be weak, I apologize to anybody fluent in the language.

As to the title, while looking up various translations of words, I came across Schlitzhor. It seems to translate into a few different meanings, including Shark, Bandit, or Pirate. All of Which I felt appropriate, since U-45's tower emblem is the skull and crossbones.

Please Enjoy!

Schlitzhor

“Sir?”

I look over at Hans-Peter, U-45’s funker. He is holding one cup of the headset to his ear, fiddling with the dials on the receiver set. He is young, blonde, the “perfect Aryan man” our ideological conforming weapons officer would say. Young, but very bright, the mastrosengeiter was top of his class at the radio operator’s school. He had told me on one of our earlier shake down patrols, before the war, that he and a friend used to tap morse code over tin can phones. For him, his job is like being a kid again.

“Yes Hans, what is it?”

“Sir, I have picked up Radio Berlin. They are finishing their news broadcast, and then follow that with some Strauss. May I…..”

“I love Strauss!” came a muffled grunt from Alois, our sonar operator, who was currently under the console apparently fixing something.

“Yes, Hans, go ahead,” I replied, “Alois, what are you doing?”

“There was some heavy crackling last time we ran a sweep, so I’m checking the circuits. Found a couple loose vacuum tubes, Kaleun. Just adjusting them”

“Sehr gut, Alois, just don’t break my boat!”

“Herr Kaleun, it may be your boat, but they’re my ears”

I smiled and laughed, as the loudspeaker started playing Strauss. Alois’s foot began to swing back and forth in time. I put the bookmark into the von Clausewitz book I was reading, placing it on the shelf next to the rest of my small collection of books. As I get up from my bunk, I nudge Alois in the leg, reminding him to try and keep the passageway clear. He grunts and shuffles to the side some, as much as lying on your back in a cramped nook will allow.

I stretched, working the kink out of my neck, adjust my shirt, and step through the hatch into the control room. The watch looks bored, but attentive to their jobs at the same time. They know better than to become complacent during these long stretches of inactivity. The watch changed just an hour or so ago, and they are settling into the grind of their watch.

I climb up the ladder to the bridge. The watch crew, overseen by my 2WO, Wolfgang Eisenholtz, is scanning their quadrants for anything. It’s unseasonably warm for mid September, the gentle breeze from our forward motion is a welcome relief. The sea is mirror flat, the sky cloudless. Makes for easy sailing, but not for staying hidden. Any patrol aircraft would be able to see us from many kilometers away. And flat seas don’t allow for stealthy approaches to targets.

Wolfgang turns, “Guten morgen Kaleun!”

“Morgen Wolfgang. Anything yet?”

“Not yet Kaleun. We saw some whales breaching a while back, Willi here thought it was a British sub surfacing, panicked a bit,” he said with a grin.

“Not really!” came the mumbled reply from the seaman peering through his binoculars, and everybody laughed.

“It would be nice to see something, it’s been a week since we saw anything!”

“Ahhh, yes, have patience, mein junge,” I said, “That trawler and small merchant were good practice for us all, especially seeing as how we had never encountered a real enemy before.”

“Kaleun, do you think they made it to shore?” Gustav, another watchman, said.

I smiled at his earnest empathy towards a fellow seaman; we were after the boats, not the men after all. “Ja, in this weather, their distress call, and the provisions we left, they should be at home right now.”

I smiled, turned to Wolfgang, and made a small twirling motion with my finger that the rest of the watch didn’t see. Wolfgang gave me one of his legendary evil grins and nodded, turning back to scan the ocean.

“I’ll be going down now, you men keep your eyes peeled. Don’t want a Jabo sneaking up on us!”

“Aye Kaleun!” Came the reply.

I took one last deep breath of the ocean air and began to climb back down the ladder. I paused inside the conning tower to check everything was stowed properly. We wouldn’t want the MG42’s or the at-ready AA cannon ammo boxes getting loose.

I continued down into the control room. I looked at the navigator’s map, checking our progress. No reason to doubt its accuracy, there has been perfectly clear skies and flat seas for the past week. Franz, our navigator, probably has our position plotted more accurately than any road map of that new autobahn they’re building could be. I fussed over a few other thing’s, checking gauges and what not, as I waited for the inevitable.

“ALLLAAAAAAAAARM!” Came the scream from the bridge.

I reached out and tapped the stopwatch over the targeting desk.

“Crash Dive!” I yelled, “All ballast hands forward!”

Shouted commands rang out all over the boat. The thunder of the herd of crew members running towards the front of the boat started to rumble towards us. The squeak of skin on metal made me look over towards the ladder as the watch slid down it. The resounding clunk of the hatch being dogged sounded out. I checked the stopwatch, 8 seconds, not bad.

“OWW!” Rang out from the direction of the radio room.

“Get out of the way Alois! Why are you laying there!?”

I had to chuckle when I heard that. I did warn him, didn’t I?

I felt the boat start to tip forward, the Chief really likes to take it deep quickly after the hatch is shut. He barely gives them enough time as it is, the water is usually already flooding the decks by the time the watch gets down. I waited a few more seconds.

“Helm! Hard to port!” I yelled, over the din of the rushing crewmen, “New course 115!”

“Aye Kaleun! Hard to Port! New course 115!” Heinrich, our chief helmsman , yelled back.

I watched the helmsman, who was suddenly very awake after his earlier doldrums, bring the boat around. These type VIIb’s handle pretty well at speed, and you could feel the twist of the boat beneath you. I felt the diesels finally cut out, and the electric motors start spinning. They are much quieter, and you can feel that in the boat itself. The engineering crew was quick, that transition usually takes more time. I’ll have to commend August, our Obermaschinist, later.

“30 meters!” Called out our Leitender Ingenieur, Herbert Linder, Chief.

“Steady on 115, Kaleun!” Heinrich called out. I nodded to him.

“50 meters!……. 60!……. 65….. 70 meters. Kaleun, level at 70m.”

“Engines slow, Rig for silent” I said.

Very quickly as the word was passed, the boat became very quiet. The Strauss had fallen silent as we dove. I felt the thrum from the electric motors die down to a gentle purr. I looked at the stopwatch on the desk. Very good, a new record for us.

“Sonar!” I hissed in a loud whisper, “Contacts?”

Alois’ head, bloodied from a cut across his forehead, leaned out into the passageway, “Not yet Kaleun, but give me a few moments to complete a sweep!” he hissed back.

I looked over at the chief, “Good job, Chief. Nice fast dive there.”

“Thank you sir.”

“Wolfgang, go check each compartment real fast, make sure everybody is silent.” I whisper.

“Aye kaleun” he says, and moves off into the boat.

“Kaleun, no sonar contacts found!” Alois hissed.

“Thank you herr elektriker” I said, grinning.

He laughs, wipes his bloody head off, then frowns at his hand, wiping it on his pants, and returns to his cave as he likes to call it.

“Bunch of church mice, kaleun,” Wolfgang said on his return.

Nodding, I said “Secure from silent running.”

“Aye, Secure from silent running!” I feel, and hear, the relief flooding back into the crew, as then they realize it’s a drill.

“Adalbert!” I yell.

Adalbert, our medic, sticks his head into the control room from the stern quarters, where his battle station is, his bunk. “Yes Kaleun?”

“Adalbert, after the stampede, please check on Alois, and you may have some other work to do also” I say.

He looks confused, “Yes sir, err, stampede sir?”

I grin and yell, “Ahead Flank, All ballast hands aft, planes at full rise, blow all ballast! Emergency blow!”

My orders are relayed around the boat; you can hear the crew starting a return migration. Adalbert’s eyes grow real big as he scoots back towards his bunk, jumps in and braces himself. As the crew rushes past, trying to get their combined weight into the stern of the boat, I look at my 1WO, Adolf Kessler, who is just shaking his head and chuckling.

The chief is yelling orders and spinning valves like a mad man, you hear the high-pressure air rushing through pipes in the hull. Gurgling noises and creaking as the boat starts to rise. The deck is starting to pitch upwards, and steeply. We all have to grab onto something fixed to keep from sliding backwards.

“50 meters! 40! 20!” Herbert yells out.

“Sound collision alarm!” I yell.

“Collision!!” Herbert yells, slapping a large button on the bulkhead. A loud bell rings out through out the boat. The men brace themselves against whatever they can find. I hold firmly to a stanchion pole, grinning ear to ear.

We feel the boat start to level off, the upward momentum draining fast, as it feels like she’s falling out from beneath us. It feels like we’re be lifted from the deck. Then the crash back down onto the surface. A few crew stumble as the boat settles out.

“Everybody ok?” I ask, looking at the grins all over the compartment.

“Well that was fun, let’s do that again!” laughs Kessler, he prefers his last name to his first, something about not wanting to be mistaken for somebody else.

“You’re crazy!” Adalbert says as he walks by, heading to check on Alois.

“Yes, and you’re all crazy for following me! But that’s what makes U-45, the Schlitzhor a great boat!” I laugh, “Check all compartments first, then see to Alois, he looks like he’ll keep for a few.”

“Aye Kaleun.”

“Diesel Engines to one third, Chief. Franz, return to our plotted course if you will please”

“Aye! Helm, set course 215” Franz calls out.

“Wolfgang, please return your watch to their station on the bridge, set boat for normal surface cruise.”

“Aye Kaleun!”

As I look around the room, I see smiles. It’s good to have an enthusiastic crew. I pull my pipe out of my pocket, fill it, and light it. This should be a good cruise, I think, as I look over the charts.

Arnold
12-26-10, 09:47 PM
Good story, Garamel. I liked it. I've read a story about a crew that played a joke on the ship's surgeon by switching the ingedients in his shampoo bottle. Another good story was one of a boat in the Pacific changing course (at the command of the Captain) towards a rain squall in the distance. Once in the rain, the crew was allowed to shower on the deck. I'd like to research the various pranks pulled on men who crossed the equator for the first time. Each country must have it's own traditions regarding that event.

frau kaleun
12-26-10, 10:18 PM
Nice story... one small niggling detail, I don't think smoking of any kind was allowed except up on deck. The commander might fill his pipe and chew on it, but I don't think he'd light it anywhere but on the bridge.

One of my favorite stories... and for the life of me I can't remember for sure who was involved, but it might have been when a new commander took over U-48. The previous commander - I think it was "Vati" Schultze - had a superstition about only setting a course divisible by 7; so whatever heading he would order, the crew would automatically adjust it to the nearest number divisible by 7 as a standard procedure.

The next commander found this out when he ordered one heading and had the helm confirm the order with a slightly different heading. He repeated the order and again it was nonchalantly confirmed with the same slightly different heading. This went on until the commander didn't know if his helmsman was insubordinate, hard of hearing, or just plain crazy until somebody finally let him know what the boat's SOP was.

IIRC, the new commander decided the SOP was good enough for him. Not a surprise if it was U-48, one of the most successful boats/crews of the war. Why mess with a good thing? :D

Mittelwaechter
12-27-10, 04:31 AM
A Schlitzohr - Schlitz for slit or slot, Ohr for ear - is a kind of crook, a man who never misses a trick, a shorty or petty criminal.

The slot in the ear came from the former worn earring torn out as penalization and badge of shame to warn everybody what kind of person that is.

Today it's a more or less respectful, esteeming term for someone who handles a situation in a raffish manner, not consequently legal but clever.

Gargamel
12-27-10, 09:27 PM
Nice story... one small niggling detail, I don't think smoking of any kind was allowed except up on deck. The commander might fill his pipe and chew on it, but I don't think he'd light it anywhere but on the bridge.

One of my favorite stories... and for the life of me I can't remember for sure who was involved, but it might have been when a new commander took over U-48. The previous commander - I think it was "Vati" Schultze - had a superstition about only setting a course divisible by 7; so whatever heading he would order, the crew would automatically adjust it to the nearest number divisible by 7 as a standard procedure.

The next commander found this out when he ordered one heading and had the helm confirm the order with a slightly different heading. He repeated the order and again it was nonchalantly confirmed with the same slightly different heading. This went on until the commander didn't know if his helmsman was insubordinate, hard of hearing, or just plain crazy until somebody finally let him know what the boat's SOP was.

IIRC, the new commander decided the SOP was good enough for him. Not a surprise if it was U-48, one of the most successful boats/crews of the war. Why mess with a good thing? :D

Yeah, theres a few things I'm going to change in the later stories, and the pipe is one of them. Shoulda finished it with him quickly climbing the ladder..... :oops:

Thanks for the reviews guys.

Gargamel
12-30-10, 03:55 AM
“What’s that mean long term Chief?”

“Well, as long as August can hold that manifold together, we should be fine. Seems like it’s a defect in the manufacturing, same thing that made us turn back earlier” He replied.

“Was für ein Haufen Scheiße! These incompetent fools keep sending us out here with ill designed equipment and then blame us for the failures!” I cursed.

“Exactly, Kaleun! You know that the head mechanic back at base said we had over revved the port engine?”

“What? We hadn’t even taken it over standard speed! We were just getting ready to put her through the paces. That delay cost us almost 2 weeks! We missed the chance to run the channel, and had to go around the isles the long way! We’ve just gotten to our assigned patrol zone! The other boats have already been able to hit a convoy!”

“Well, I don’t think the Fuehrer received my telegram to hold off on the war.”

I laughed, “Even if he did, I don’t think he listens to us line officers very well.” We both chuckled at that.

“So how much fuel was wasted?”

“Not too much, maybe a few dozen liters worth. We gave Heinrich hell with the trim while we fully pumped out the bilges and flushed with seawater. Franz says it shouldn’t affect our range too much, a day lost at worst.”

I pulled out my pipe, filling it, “Fair enough, keep an eye on it. Check the other one’s too, we don’t need this happening again. Getting stuck out here would be very bad. Anything else Chief?”

“No, Kaleun, I’ll get on that right away”

“Sehr gut,” I said, looking over the other gauges.

I put the unlit pipe in my mouth and started up the ladder, wanting to get some fresh air and enjoy my pipe. Kessler had rightly chastised me last time for lighting up inside the boat. The weather was still dead calm, and perfect for being on the bridge. A far cry from what had experienced while working up the boat in the Baltic and North Sea during the spring.

“Alllaaaaarm!!!!” Came the cry from above, forcing me to reverse course.

Stepping away from the ladder, “Crash Dive! Ahead Flank! Ballast hands forward!” I yelled.

The watch crew came down the ladder, crew started rushing towards the front of the boat, Chief was with them, stopping in the control room.

“What is it Wolfgang?” I yelled, as he landed. The helmsman and Chief were spinning valves, diving the boat, the thrum of the engines increasing.

“Jabo sir! About 80 degrees out, I think they saw us about the same time we did, they turned towards us!”

“Chief, soon as we’re under, turn to port 60 degrees, change our direction!”

“Aye herr Kaleun!”

The hissing and clunking noises of the diving boat continued, The Chief and helmsman still twisting the valves. Looking around the room, I saw wide eyes. This was our first encounter with a truly hostile entity, nobody knew what to really expect. I was scared myself, but forcing myself to not show it.

“Submerged Kaleun! Hard to port!” Chief called out. The diesels had faded away, soon replaced by the electric motors. We waited.

It didn’t take long. A loud explosion, maybe two, was felt, the boat shook, the plotting triangle fell to he floor. I had to brace myself from being knocked over.

“Damage?” I called out.

Our Navigator, Franz, heading for the aft hatch, “One minute Kaleun!” We had decided that since navigation while submerged was pretty much following a course and staring at a clock, that Franz could be better used elsewhere during times of crisis. He was the repair officer, coordinating our damage control teams, with close help from the engineering specialists on board.

“Nothing aft! Just some scared crew!” Franz yelled as he ran through the control room, heading forward.

“Steady at 70 meters Kaleun! Nothing irregular trim wise sir!” Chief said.

“Aye, reduce speed to one third please” I said.

Franz came through the hatch, “Same forward sir, just some rattled boys.”

“Gut! Maintain this heading for 30 minutes, then return to our previous course for an hour,” I said, “We’ll wait for the air to clear before popping our heads back up there.”

“Aye Kaleun” Franz said.

“Tommies can’t hit a barn!” I said, laughing. Some of the crew grinned back at me.

“Well, I’m going to check on the crew, call me if you need” I said, heading towards the hatch. I was really going to the head, as I wasn’t totally sure if I hadn’t already.

TarJak
12-30-10, 05:56 AM
Good stuff keep it up.:up:

Brag
12-30-10, 03:41 PM
Good writing, keep going!
I would like to see a few more thoughts in Kaleun´s hard. Give him a bit more depth.

I find writing in the present tense very difficult.
I noticed a few echoes.
Try to avoid gerunds (words ending in ing)
Over all, a good read. :DL

Gargamel
12-30-10, 04:33 PM
Good writing, keep going!
I would like to see a few more thoughts in Kaleun´s hard. Give him a bit more depth.

I find writing in the present tense very difficult.
I noticed a few echoes.
Try to avoid gerunds (words ending in ing)
Over all, a good read. :DL

Yes, I find i write more of a movie script style, more dialogue and action, rather than thoughts and feelings. I'll work on that.

Ty for all reviews and critiques! I welcome everything.

Few years ago, I read Stephen King's autobiography (on writing), where he includes how he writes his stories. HE says he doesn't really plan, other than a general idea, where his stories are going, he's as much a reader as us as he writes it, the stories just flow from him. I find that's how I write a bit, The first part about the engine never popped into my head until i was writing it.

Big "action sequence" coming up in next chapter, then I'll get more into the character building, got ideas on that one already.

Edit: woot! 500th post! Least it wasnt just a "lolz good pic!"

Brag
12-30-10, 05:01 PM
Few years ago, I read Stephen King's autobiography (on writing), where he includes how he writes his stories. HE says he doesn't really plan, other than a general idea, where his stories are going, he's as much a reader as us as he writes it, the stories just flow from him. I find that's how I write a bit, The first part about the engine never popped into my head until i was writing it.

Big "action sequence" coming up in next chapter, then I'll get more into the character building, got ideas on that one already.


The fun part about writing is discovering all sorts of unplanned things about the setting and the characters- :DL

frau kaleun
12-30-10, 07:18 PM
Few years ago, I read Stephen King's autobiography (on writing), where he includes how he writes his stories.

One of the best books about writing I've ever come across. IMO King is underrated as a writer because so much of his work falls into the horror/fantasy genre. Much like Terry Pratchett, who gets lumped into "fantasy fiction" but has become one of sharpest satirists around.


Edit: woot! 500th post! Least it wasnt just a "lolz good pic!"

Congrats! :woot:

Gargamel
01-12-11, 01:37 AM
“Kaleun to the Bridge! Smoke on the Horizon!”

I turned and looked up at the conning tower ladder. I had been at the chart desk, re-doing the math for what must have been the hundredth time. 2 days ago U-46 had reported a convoy heading toward our position. Onkel Karl seemed to know what he was doing, shifting us here from the supposed shipping lane we had been in. Ever since we received the report, we had been on a run to the south trying to get into position to attack.

As I stepped towards the ladder, one of the lookouts came sliding down the ladder.

“Gustav! Where are you going?” I asked, “Your post is on the bridge!”

“One minute Kaleun!” he said, holding up one finger. He ducked through the hatch and ran towards the front of the boat.

I grabbed a pair of binoculars and hurried up the ladder, and turned the officer, “Wolfgang! Where is Gustav going?”

“It’s alright Kaleun, he has my permission, and he’ll be right back.”

I frowned, lookouts can’t do their job inside the boat, but for now I’d give them the benefit of the doubt.

“Well then, what do you see?”

“There’s thick smoke on the horizon, about 35 degrees to starboard.”

I raised the binoculars to my eyes and looked in the direction he pointed. There I saw a diffuse dark cloud on the horizon.

“Fog?” I asked, not really believing it.

Wolfgang looked at me, incredulity on his face “With this weather sir?”

I grinned, the weather was still dead calm, not a cloud in the sky, still warm for even September, especially this far from shore. “Yes, your right. That must be it then, little earlier than I planned.”

Right then, Gustav returned to the bridge, carrying a satchel. I looked at the bag, then to Wolfgang, who just had a sly grin on his face, as if he was privy to a joke that I knew nothing about.

“Apologies Kaleun, I don’t like to keep this with me on watch.” He proceeded to open the satchel and pull out the largest pair of binoculars I had ever seen.

“Perkele Gustav!” I exclaimed.

“Sir?”

“Nothing, just something my grandmother used to say. Where the hell did you get those?”

“My uncle works at the observatory in Berlin. He gave these to me as a gift, said they may find better use looking for ships than stars. Problem is, they are too big to use for scanning, too shaky, but they work okay for seeing targets way in the distance.” With that, he leaned his elbows on the edge of the bridge and peered through the massive binoculars. He was right, they were almost twice the size of the UZO, and no way anybody could hand hold them steadily.

“Gustav, when we get a chance, talk to a machinist about making a brace for those, they may come in useful.”

“Aye, Kaleun!” He replied with a grin.

“Well then, what do you see?”

“Just smoke sir, but it’s definitely a convoy, I can see smoke from individual stacks, but I can’t see any ships yet.”

“Gustav, if you ever leave my boat, I’ll pay you a month’s wages for those” I said.

“Your month’s wages or mine?” he answered with a grin.

“We’ll see son,” I said, “Which direction are they heading? Can you tell?”

He peered for a few moments more, “It’s tough to tell Kaleun, but my best guess is about 20 degrees Port angle on bow, coming towards us.”

I looked at Wolfgang, and could tell he was doing the math in his head too.

“About 20 degrees to port should drop us right in front of them in about an hour at this speed?” I asked him.

“Aye, sounds about right Kaleun” He replied.

I nodded, heading for the hatch, “Be alert men, we’re going to drop down a bit, try to stay dry.”

“Aye Kaleun!” came the enthusiastic reply.

After I climbed down the ladder, I turned to the Chief, who waited for some of the good news, “Chief, run us at decks awash, increase to full speed. Convoy is sighted, we’re going to try and get in front of them.”

“Finally!” He said, turned to the crew at the helm, and barked orders.

DJRenegade
01-12-11, 09:44 AM
Really enjoying this so far - i always wanted to write a book, but like you said, mine turn more into movie scripts lol. In school, when everyone had to write a small story for English coursework (4-5 pages) i wrote a 30 page script xD

Gargamel
01-15-11, 12:17 AM
“Alois, are you sure?” I asked.

“As much as I can be Kaleun,” he replied, and replaced the headphones back on, listening intently, slowly turning the hydrophone wheel.

I rubbed my head, could it be true? Could the Tommies only have one destroyer with this convoy? And such a prize in the middle! A Battleship! I returned to the control room, all eyes on me.

I raised the periscope again, just barely breaking the surface. In these flat seas, a fully raised scope would leave a large wake, and that would be very bad for us if it were spotted by the lone destroyer at the front of the convoy. I scanned the horizon again, noting the destroyer, and then looking around the edges of the convoy. I still did not see any other escorts. And then I looked back into the convoy itself, full of large merchants, tankers, and a couple converted whale factory ships. Juicy targets, all of them. And then there was the real prize, the Revenge class battleship cruising slowly at the middle of the pack. I flipped through the recognition manual, comparing what I saw to what the book showed.

“Set tubes one and two to…. four meters depth. Set three and four to …… nine and a half, and keep tube five at five meters, that’s our snapshot torpedo if we need it, ” I looked at Kessler and whispered, “Make sure tube one is set to the right depth, we’re going to take out the escort first! We can’t have any mistakes!”

“Aye…. Aye Kaleun!” He replied, looking bemused, and headed forward towards the torpedo room.

“Franz, make sure the damage parties are properly stationed and ready for action,” I said.

He nodded and headed aft.

I looked around the control room, young nervous boys at the helm, older men elsewhere around the room, but no less nervous.

I grinned, “Don’t worry men, the Tommies won’t know what’s coming!” A few smiles were returned. I was scared too, but I could not show it. Right then, bluster was all I had.

“Sir! We cannot attack a destroyer first! Our orders are to only attack warships in self-defense! We can only initiate hostilities with merchants! The Fuehrer wants to placate the British as much as possible!”

I turned, there stood Wolfgang Shultze, our torpedo officer, with Kessler doggedly standing behind him, a sheepish look on his face. He was assigned to our boat when our regular torpedo officer had broken his leg in a training accident over the summer. His uncle was some admiral, and helped get him a posting on a frontline boat. He openly spoke of commanding one of the great surface ships one day. None of us thought that would happen, as he drank too much, even on patrol, to be a reliable officer.

“What are you doing here? Get back to your post!” I hissed.

“Sir! Our orders!” He whined.

“If you do not return to your post, I will have you shot, then court-martialed!” I hissed back at him, “And be quiet! We’re running silent!”

“Yes Kaleun!” He whispered, and saluted, which I did not return. After an uncomfortably long time, he ducked back under the forward hatch.

Kessler looked at me, then whispered, “Herr Kaleun Moritz, a word please?”

I looked at him, and then nodded, “Be quick though. Wolfgang, take the scope, call if the escort gets within two thousand meters.”

“Aye Kaleun.”

We stepped aft into the officer’s galley.

“Kaleun, excuse my frankness here, but he was partially right.”

I thought for a moment, then said, “Yes, he was, but he abandoned his post while we are at battle stations.”

“You are right, that is inexcusable, but to his point…?” He whispered.

“As soon as we attack those merchants, we will come under attack. Therefore, we can preemptively defend ourselves by attacking them, yes?” I whispered, a grin on my face, “At least, that’s how it’s going into the report.”

He pondered this for a moment, then grinned, “Aye Kaleun, I can agree to that. As to Schultze, he wasn’t even totally sure how to set the depths correctly, and then wanted to know why so shallow. When I mentioned the destroyer he stormed back here to confront you.”

I nodded, “We’ll have to do something about him, but later. Right now, we have some ships to sink!”

We walked back into the control room. I quickly retook the scope from Wolfgang. I made a quick scan of the horizon again. Still, only the one escort. I was confused. This didn’t make sense. We had been told to expect heavy anti-sub escorts with convoys. The doctrine was a poorly escorted convoy was worse than no convoy. I studied the merchants again, and could not see anything out of the ordinary, just normal merchants. I returned to destroyer, and redid the math in my head again.

“Helm, bring us fifteen degrees to port, then set engines to 60 RPM’s, open tube one.” I whispered, “Kessler, take a look, any of these look like Q ships too you?”

He took the scope from me. I watched the crew follow my orders. The thrum of the motors just about disappeared. It was deathly silent on the boat; I heard somebody sniff from another compartment. Kessler scanned through the scope, he turned the handles back and forth as he looked at each ship..

He pulled his face from the scope, “They all look like normal freighters and tankers to me. But Kaleun, are you really worried about Q ships when there’s a battleship in the middle of the convoy?”

I grinned, “Ah yes, good point. No point in setting a trap if your prey runs away screaming, now is there?”

I took the scope back from Kessler. The destroyer was almost in position. They weren’t even maneuvering, just plodding along like a dog in front of its master.

“Steady… tube one is ready, yes?”

“Yes Kaleun.”

I keep the scope fixed on the destroyer. I waited. It just kept blindly sailing on. If all of the British Navy are this stupid, this should be a short and easy war. I watched the gyro-angle indicator roll down towards zero.

“Steady… Steady… Los!”

Gargamel
01-15-11, 12:18 AM
Yes, I know the scope is the conning tower, but for simplicity sake, I moved it to the control tower. If that bugs you, just imagine them climbing the ladder. :D

As you will find out, this is actually occurring in a parallel reality.

Gargamel
01-19-11, 04:54 AM
We waited. The TDC said it was just over 2 minutes till the eel hit, but it felt like a year. I had to remind myself to breathe. If this went wrong, we would be in deep trouble.

Kessler counted down the time until the estimated impact, “5... 4... 3... “

A large plume of water erupted around the middle of the destroyer. Then a large flash, and the ship was lifted from the water, bending in two. She settled back onto the water, her two halves slowly drifting apart as they sank. We felt, almost immediately, the rumble of the detonation, followed by a sharp crack.

“Impact!” I hissed, muted cheers were exclaimed throughout the boat, “We broke her back, she’s going down!”

I stared at the crippled ship for a few moments more. I could see crew desperately trying to reach life boats, or even just the safety of not being on the dying ship. I panned the scope around towards our next target, the battleship. The ships in the convoy were starting to turn sharply, they had begun to perform zig-zag maneuvers in hopes of avoiding the next torpedo. I could almost hear the klaxon alarms going off. I knew exactly how they sounded from my years on the merchant ships I cut my teeth on before joining the Kriegsmarine.

“New course, two zero zero,” I called out, not bothering to whisper anymore, “Engines ahead standard, secure from silent running!”

“Aye Kaleun!” came multiple replies.

The big warship was drawing nearer, it’s crew frantically searching the seas, trying to spot us. We hoped they wouldn’t. Those big main guns, even the smaller secondary guns, would be the same as a bomb going off right next to us if they managed to fire at us.

“Open tubes two and four!” I called out.

I continued to wait, plotting our intercept in my head. I panned around to the sides, the lead elements of the convoy had already passed our position. I turned back to the Revenge, I couldn’t quite make out exactly which one it was, but the camouflage pattern painted on the side was very distinct. I should be able to identify it later. I panned along the length of the ship, picking out my target points.

“Tube 2.... match bearing..... Los! Tube 4..... match bearing..... Los! Open tube 3!” I called out, “Hard to starboard!New course two five zero!”

We felt the thumps as the torpedoes raced from their tubes, and the doors closed behind them. They would have to see the trails the gas torpedoes left behind. There’s no way they could miss them, I thought.

A few moments passed before a large plume of water erupted under the forward gun battery, soon followed by another one midships. The great battleship lifted and rolled some with the explosions, but continued along her path. The large secondary explosions I had hoped for, ripping her apart, never happened.

“Hard to port!” I screamed, trying to get the boat in line for another shot.

Crew were running frantically along the battleship’s deck. I couldn’t tell if they were running to battle stations, or trying to abandon. She still looked in too good of shape to abandon.

“Rudder amidships!” I yelled out, paused a moment, followed by “Tube 3, match bearing! Los!”

I then noticed sailors on the ship pointing in our direction. The were indicating to others farther down the deck, trying to get the attention of an officer it seemed. Apparently they were successful, as I saw the first aft main gun turret start to traverse towards our position.

“Scheibe! Scheibe!" I yelled, "Ahead Flank! Hard to starboard! Full Dive!"

I should have lowered the scope, but I was mesmerized by those huge barrels swinging towards us. I even raised the scope higher, so it would stay above water longer as we dove. I could hear men yelling orders and running behind me, but I was fixated on those huge guns. They were almost right at us now, we were so close I could actually see right down them, I could even see the rifling on the inside of the barrel. If they fired with any accuracy, we didn’t stand a chance.

Another huge water plume erupted right below the turret. The barrels sticking out through the cloud of water looked like a giant dragon poking the tip of it’s nose through a waterfall.

Then the dragon breathed.

Gargamel
01-19-11, 04:57 AM
Sorry bout the color, since my HDD crashed, I've been typing this out on my laptop using google docs. Apparently google uses black text, little difficult to read :D

frau kaleun
01-19-11, 08:48 AM
I should have lowered the scope, but I was mesmerized by those huge barrels swinging towards us. I even raised the scope higher, so it would stay above water longer as we dove. I could hear men yelling orders and running behind me, but I was fixated on those huge guns. They were almost right at us now, we were so close I could actually see right down them, I could even see the rifling on the inside of the barrel. If they fired with any accuracy, we didn’t stand a chance.

Another huge water plume erupted right below the turret. The barrels sticking out through the cloud of water looked like a giant dragon poking the tip of it’s nose through a waterfall.

Then the dragon breathed.

Very well done! :rock:

Lord_magerius
01-19-11, 09:10 AM
Definitely one of the best stories I have ever read on here. Keep up the good work :yeah:

Brag
01-19-11, 09:12 AM
Congratz!
Your writing has improved tremendously since you started this story. Excellent metaphor at the end.:salute::salute::salute:

Gargamel
01-19-11, 08:34 PM
Ahh thank you all. Wasn't sure if anybody had been reading this, LOL.

Gargamel
01-25-11, 12:06 AM
My knees buckled as the boat violently lifted beneath me. I fell down hard, landing on somebody, couldn’t tell who, the lights had gone out. There were screams of pain and panic all around me.

“Damage Report!” I screamed, getting up from the deck. My leg hurt fiercely, I didn’t feel anything break, so I hoped it was just bruised. I tested it, it held. The emergency lights came on. A large explosion was felt through the deck. We all looked each, wide eyed. This was followed by several smaller explosions.

“I need a damage report now, Verdammt!” I yelled again, “Helm! What’s our depth?! Take us to scope depth! I need to see!”

“Still 12 meters Kaleun! Holding steady! No obvious trim problems! We didn’t have time to start the dive!” The coxswain, Heinrich, called out. Water was streaming in from various locations in the zentrale, but none seemed to be of a critical amount. One pipe was spraying high pressure water into a fine mist.

I stepped up to the periscope, I had to see what happened. Water pouring down over my head. I placed my eye’s to the eye piece, it was if I had tried to look through a fish bowl. The seals had blown on the scope! I snapped the handles up, trying to lower it, but the motors just made a grinding noise.

“Scheibe!” I muttered. I stepped over to the observation scope. I hoped the crew on that man-o-war would be too busy with damage to notice the larger scope piercing the surface. I raised it slowly, not wanting to damage our only way to see.

“Damage report!” I called again.

“Sir! The forward torpedo room is flooding!” Yelled a voice. I looked around, it was Schultze, soaked to the bone.

“Why aren’t you fixing it then!?” I screamed at him, “You should be back there leading the repairs!”

“Yes.... yessir!” he replied. I was glad my pistol was in the safe, for I might have shot him where he stood. He disappeared through the hatch.

“Kaleun!” It was Franz this time, “Incidental damage and flooding in most compartments, should be easily contained. Forward Torpedo room is flooding moderately, tubes one and three are the source, they seem to have popped the seals on the doors. Should be fixable.”

“OK then,” I said, “let’s get those fixed, any injuries?”

“Nothing I noticed sir, but I have Adalbert checking everyone out.”

I nodded, and focused on the scope again. I raised it up a bit more, I needed a clear picture on what happened on the surface. I panned around, seemingly panicked merchants were travelling in all directions, no semblance of order was apparent. I then saw heavy smoke, debris, men flailing in the water. Then I gasped, there she was. The battleship had broken in two. The stern was almost gone, but the forward two thirds of the ship were slowly sinking.

I paused for a moment, and weighed my options. After a moments thought, I realized there wasn’t much to consider. I started to get very excited at the situation that had been laid out before us.

“Deck gun crew at the ready! Watch Crew prepare small arms! Flak gunner at the ready!” I yelled out, grinning, “Surface the ship! Blow the tanks, pop her up quick Chief!”

The crew all stopped what they were doing and just stared at me for a moment. Then slowly, and then quickly, my orders my orders were relayed around the boat. Crew began moving quickly around the boat, preparing for the surface action we were about to partake in.

“Chief, have Franz keep up on the repairs, and make sure the ammo is fed up to the bridge quickly, I think we’re going to need a lot of it.” I said.

“Aye sir,” He replied, then after a pause, “And we’re surfaced Kaleun!”

“Wolfgang! have your watch crew set up the machine guns on the bridge, we’re going to need them!”

“Aye!” He cried as he scrambled up the bridge, his watch crew close behind. The gun crews stood behind them, ammo boxes in hand. They were quickly up the ladder. I followed them up. I looked around, the battleship was settling into the depths, men were everywhere the water. We had surfaced right in the middle of the convoy. I quickly scanned the horizon, not another escort to be seen. I only hoped we could have our feast before any more could arrive.

Brag
01-25-11, 08:53 AM
Conflict is the essence of a story. You have plenty of it here :salute: